tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4697562568281773339.post1262898795197880747..comments2024-03-05T06:55:21.597-05:00Comments on Dori Reads: My ExperimentDorainehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04421672075192660319noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4697562568281773339.post-27678847730902043772009-05-29T17:56:16.610-04:002009-05-29T17:56:16.610-04:00Thanks to each of you for your thoughts. This was ...Thanks to each of you for your thoughts. This was an excellent experiment. I learned a lot from it. I realized that there were things in each one that I hadn't actually written out in the original first scene. I'm still debating how my rewrite is going to look, but I'm betting I will use a bit from all of them.Dorainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04421672075192660319noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4697562568281773339.post-85548324335369535902009-05-29T12:32:19.059-04:002009-05-29T12:32:19.059-04:00I vote action, too.I vote action, too.Sarah Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04306229509907096254noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4697562568281773339.post-89939327632445955562009-05-28T16:15:54.408-04:002009-05-28T16:15:54.408-04:00This is for kids, right? ACTION all the way!!This is for kids, right? ACTION all the way!!Irene Lathamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04905936104127707762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4697562568281773339.post-40488763283464400952009-05-28T12:06:07.747-04:002009-05-28T12:06:07.747-04:00My favorite is Description. I like how the exposi...My favorite is Description. I like how the exposition gives a historical context, but it seems so impersonal.Ben Brennerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10116095492171664737noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4697562568281773339.post-23160716671965555762009-05-28T10:50:25.610-04:002009-05-28T10:50:25.610-04:00Having read the story, I like the "Exposition" as ...Having read the story, I like the "Exposition" as the first scene. I think I would very much be drawn further in if your "conversation" were the second scene. I really did like how you wrote it originally, but now it's all muddled in my mind and I can't remember how you began the story!Sarah/Roberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12858210056783839858noreply@blogger.com