Friday, May 9, 2014

Lyrical Language

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Happy Poetry Friday. Stop by Jama's Alphabet Soup for this week's roundup.

I have just completed the first full week of Renée LaTulippe's Lyrical Language Lab and I'm having such fun! It's a one month course Renée teaches online. I suggest you rush right over to No Water River and sign up immediately for the next open slot on her schedule whether you write poetry, picture books or prose.

The class operates on a closed Facebook page. I have taken online classes that use email and listserve options for feedback. Honestly none of them are hastle free. The closed Facebook option seems to work well. Of course, Facebook is right there and you know it can suck you right down its throat into the belly of your second cousin's nephew's toddler's antics. But that's not Renée's fault. Right?

Seriously, this is a wonderful class with lots of interaction and helpful feedback. It's well worth taking a month to focus on lyrical language.

My trochee poem from class. Why, oh why do I have such a hard time coming up with titles?


Hungry, hungry caterpillar,
you have one last chance.
Mother doesn't like you chewing
all her garden plants.

Wriggle, wriggle, caterpillar,
climb up this sweet pea.
Find one leafy hiding place
Mother will not see.

Hurry, hurry, caterpillar,
spin your silk cocoon.
Do your morphing, your transforming.
She will be here soon!

© Doraine Bennett

8 comments:

  1. Delightful poem, Dori! Nice to hear such great feedback about Renee's class, too.

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  2. Renee is sure getting some stellar reviews! Nice to not only hear about the benefits, but see the results in you whimsical poem.

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  3. Thanks for sharing your poem. The caterpillar is one fascinating creature.

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  4. It's not my fault, Dori! Haha! It's been great having a PF-er in class. Looking forward to the next three weeks!

    I see you revised some more. Looking good! :)

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  5. I wish I could hop into one of Renee's classes. Maybe soon, Dori. This is delightful, love the voice of that sneaky caterpillar!

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  6. This line from your post cracked me up:
    "Of course, Facebook is right there and you know it can suck you right down its throat into the belly of your second cousin's nephew's toddler's antics."

    Your poem is fun. I like the perspective.

    Violet N.

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  7. Possible title:

    To the Caterpillar in Mother's Garden

    Fun poem! I wish I had time for all the online classes I want to take!

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  8. Lovely poem! Thanks for sharing your experience being in Renee's online class! Sounds like a lot of fun indeed.

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