Thanksgiving dinner at my house this year is going to be a quiet affair. I'm looking forward to a simple holiday this year, grateful that my in-laws are still part of my life, grateful that my youngest daughter is living in the same town with me, grateful for my dear hubby. Last week he told me I was the greatest blessing of his life. What a sweet man. So my Thanksgiving poem is for him.
I've been experimenting with a few traditional poetry forms this week. I tried my hand at linked sonnets, but that effort is not printable at the moment. Poetry forms can be maddening sometimes. Playing with them, forcing my words to conform to meter and rhyme often distills the thought process, even if I throw out the form and keep what's left. That's what happened as I tried Tricia's Terzanelle poetry stretch. It was definitely a stretch, and still not especially skillful, but I like the result. I kept the pattern, but threw out the rhyme.
Thankful
for the late rose
blushing red
against my cheek
for the sunset
masked by clouds
blushing red
for the first hesitant
blink of starlight
masked by clouds
for the barred owl
startled by
blink of starlight
for the fog
your warm breath
startled by
the night sky
for the late rose
your warm breath
against my cheek
© Doraine Bennett 2015
Tricia hosts the Poetry Friday roundup today at Miss Rumphius Effect.
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Oh, this is so beautiful and sweet! Isn't it great to have found that special guy you get for a lifetime?
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely!
DeleteIt's lovely. What a perfect form for writing about someone you spend years with--beauty repeats and new things come along, too.
ReplyDeleteYes, I like your take on repeating beauty. Thanks.
DeleteFascinating form, and you've done well with it. I'm going to give it a try, too - thanks for the inspiration.
ReplyDeleteIt's definitely a challenging form, especially if you try to add the rhyme. Share your results!
DeleteVery nicely done!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Matt.
DeleteCool, Dori! I agree with Karin that the form is appropriate for the topic :-) Hope you have a wonderful holiday together!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Tabatha. Enjoy your holiday, too.
DeleteI love the way the form works, like quiet exclamation of those things that matter. Happy Thanksgiving, Dori. We will have fewer at our table this year, too, but still a day to be thankful for so much.
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautiful, Dori. I'd say you and your hubby are both winners for finding each other! Happy Thanksgiving.
ReplyDeleteThinking your gift of sharing this form. The reading to my ear is lyrical.
ReplyDeleteFestive Thanksgiving to you & your hubby.